The shape of traditional families have changed ever since. The todays traditional family, consisting of a man a woman and approximately 2,1 children. But be serious, who does really have 2,1 children? In my opinion love and understanding counts, rather than size and setup. In the following essay I'll explain why.
When talking about families, people often mean the traditional family. what is ideal changes from individual to individual. In contrast to that, one thing doesn't change - everyone wants love, everyone wants to be understood. Why would you want to have a traditional family, which is always fighting? Of course there's also fights in non-tradtional families as well, but size and shape is of no importance when it comes to understanding.
When it comes to the relationship between family members you often hear people saying that they wouldn't want all the fighting at all. In my opinion that is far beyond ideal. I mean, what is more human than fighting? The key to this is called "balance" - balance between loving and fighting.
Society cares a lot about shapes and sizes, for example in China: people are not allowed to have more than one child, unless they pay certain taxes. Another example is, that gay-families don't have the social status they deserve. I think my thought of an ideal family is way more valuable than just certain setups. Not rarely children of aggressive and also violent parents tend to be aggressive and violent in the future. Roll models influence the social behaviour of children more than the family setup. Furthermore parents are the most important roll models for children, if there's a lot of fighting at home, what else should children learn but fighting from that?
To sum up, in my opinion it's not important wheter shape or size is close to the statistical traditional family its rather the atmosphere inside the family. It doesn't matter if you are gay or straight. It doesn't matter how many children you raise. It doesn't matter of which race you are, as long as you do your best to create the most harmonic atmosphere possible.
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g: shape --> has changed
str: ever since WHEN?
g / str: Today's tradional family ... Your sentence is incomplete.
exp: 2.1 (point not comma!)
CO? - "But be serious ...." This sentence doesn't fit here. You distract.
CO? "In my opinion ..." -- Again there's a lack of coherence and because of this the sentence is not fully comprehensible.
[Your introduction is not suitable and adequate for an opinion essay.]
exp: 'mean' = bedeuten or 'I mean' is a bit like 'Ich will damit sagen' --> think of
CO? Your sentences are not properly connected.
g: there are also fights ...
[paragraph 1] This paragraph is incoherent. You just write what comes to your mind - there's no plan, no structure behind it. You don't really prove a point here.]
g: you often hear people say
g: they don't like / enjoy (?) all the fighting
exp: "In my opinion that is far beyond ideal" ??C?
exp: "I think my thought of an ideal family is way more valuable than just certain setups." C???
exp: "Not rarely children of aggressive and also violent parents tend to be aggressive and violent in the future." C???
sp: role models
exp: "if there's a lot of fighting at home, what else should children learn but fighting from that?" C????
exp: "in my opinion it's not important wheter shape or size is close to the statistical traditional family its rather the atmosphere inside the family" C???
exp: "it doesn't matter if" --> no matter whether ... or ...
exp: "of which race you are,"
This is not at all the level expected in an 8th form. You convey the impression that you wrote this down very quickly and without thinking. There's no plan and logical development behind this text. The structure is bad as well. There are grave language problems - esp. with regard to vocabulary. And this is not really an opinion essay.
You will have to do better than this!
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